Monday, March 9, 2015

Imitation Draft

Here's the link to one of the works I imitated by James Joyce http://www.indiana.edu/~liblilly/joyce/gas1.html

Here we are in these Nortwest Plains
Moving about, hoping it rains.
The smell in the air has a hint of manure
Will it stay cold? No way to be sure.
The wind of Lubbock does not cease
It may die down but will increase.
This constant breeze will alter the weather
Sometimes it gets worse, sometimes it gets better.
This magic town known as Hub City
Has shitty drivers; they're really quite shitty.
No turn signals, no limits of speed
Cops rarely spot these common misdeeds.
Often ran are the stop signs and lights
With roads most dangerous during the nights.
Most of these drivers cannot be trusted
Their disregard has left me disgusted.
This dusty town is abundant with poor
Sure to be begging outside the store.
They take any change that they can get
The cause of their problems starts with debt.
Some able bodied and some quite old
Some are polite while others are bold.
They will approach and ask for assistance
Thus shining a light upon their existence.
An early home for rock and roll
From Buddy Holly, God rest his soul.
His new ideas had changed the tune
Sadly he was taken too soon.
Called to the heavens at twenty two
No more songs of Peggy Sue.
With news of his death many cried
It's said that day the music died.
With thoughts of Lubbock comes Texas Tech
Preparing the students for life's long trek.
The campus is spread out, far and wide
And always flowing with Raider pride.
I have been shaped by Raiderland:
Provided knowledge not prior at hand.
The main event that comes with fall
Is a Texas tradition known as football.
Now we have the return of the King
And soon again the bells shall ring.
With the Lubbock crowd filling the Jones
Unified chants send chills to the bones.
This atmosphere has a deafening roar
Rival teams don't know whats in store.
Our student section is wild and loud
Cheering our Raiders who make us proud.
We know the Raiders will claw and fight
And battle our foes deep into the night.
After the gridiron we move to the court
Where our Red Raiders hold down the fort.
They shoot, they hustle, and they play D
They make us proud of the Double T.
We watch our teams in the USA
Gotcher and Battle and Odiase
We yell our chants of "Raider Power!"
With hopes of opponents returning home sour.
With on court action nearing the end
The baseball games we shall attend.
Watching the games at Rip Griffin Park
Cheering our Raiders from light to dark

This is a second work that I still need to finish but this one imitates Joyce's Lean Out of the Window
link: http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/lean-out-of-the-window/

Stay in your room,
don't you dare
Your teachers have told me,
how you swear.

Was busy at work
but now I am here
Your mother, poor soul,
she cannot think clear.

I go to the school,
to hear what you've done
When I take off this belt,

you better not run.

We try and we try,
to work with you
But following rules,
you simply can't  do.


3 comments:

  1. Having just read Joyce in another one of my classes, I think you did a good job with a difficult author.

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  2. I agree with Daniel. You did a pretty good job at keeping with the couplets, which is difficult. Once you get going on your second poem, I think you'll do well on that too. Joyce is difficult, but I think you handled it well.

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  3. Brian, ok I’m going to start by saying I was a little lost while reading the original piece of work and had to read it twice but I did find it rather funny. Now on to your first ruff draft, I think you have done a really great job with your imitation on this. You went in a totally different direction from the original yet it still sounds like that author.

    On your second piece even though its not finished I think you have done a great job imitating this. I like how you went with a kid in trouble. It still has the same feel and rhythm as the original. I think you’ve done a great job with these.

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